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The MegaCorp Sheepinator is used to turn our enemies into sheep. It does not need any ammunition1. To use it we simply point the muzzle in the direction of our enemy, pull the trigger, hold the orange beam on the target 2, and wait for the progress bar to fill up3. Then our foe will become a harmless sheep. We can also lock on4 to our enemy before pulling the trigger, but this is not required. Large enemies can be sheepinated too. It will take more time than for small enemies. MegaCorp also offers a Black Sheepinator that makes the sheep explode after transformation.

Notes from a subject matter expert

  1. Most weapons in this context do use ammunition, which must be collected or it will run out. It’s therefore notable that this one doesn’t run out of ammo.

  2. When the user pulls the trigger, an orange beam of light comes out of the muzzle of the weapon. After a time, this orange beam turns things into sheep.

  3. The progress bar displays on the user’s screen. This is known functionality and does not need to be explained.

  4. Lock-on mode is available on many weapons. It is known functionality and does not need to be explained.